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Nearly Was Last Journey

As life flows like a river
the banks of the river also give way.
no boatmen dare come closer
as much as to share
a minuscule hand of love

Life gradually surges
the speed of the heart hastens
is the estuary yet far away
someone say
mind beckons

the river of love
hastens
to merge with its mummy ocean
do they merge tonight
let us see
come besides me

Style / type: 
Free verse
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
At times we wonder whether 'tis our last
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Not Explicit Content

Comments

would the third line read better as
no boatmen dare come closer ?
there is much inuendo in your poem

Chrys

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Lynn
however amended the line
you r a
good mentor for me
thanks
lovedly

author comment

Hi, lovedly, I like poems about rivers that flow and all the imagery in your poem. I just wonder about using "mummy ocean"? Is it meant for a child?
No other nits, enjoyed, Gracy

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"My soul is painted like the wings of butterflies; fairy tales of yesterday will grow but never die, I can fly, my friends.” – Freddie Mercury

no not really last time I said
mom
someone said
why not say mummy

poetry and poets
quite often appear silly
wee wee wee
what can de we
lol
Gracy ma'am
that's all

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