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Daddy don't cry for me......An emotional audition

Submitted by lovedly on Mon, 2021-04-05 19:57

I just saw an audition
the girl had to sing a song
for her 'dying' dad
who was
present in the audience
along with her mom

even the four judges cried
a poet must have the vibes
of being calm and silent
but the audience
should shed tears

weep loud enough
for the softest ears

then sing a chorus
what ever will be
will be
what ever will be
oh daddy don't cry

she won the emotion
now you try singing one

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Free verse
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Geezer

Tue, 2021-04-06 07:44

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It's a tear-jerker! Get your hand-kerchief out my boy! Only crit. is to get rid of the [also]. Best line? [ weep loud enough for the softest ears.] ~ Geez.
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lovedly

Tue, 2021-04-06 10:56

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Gee is handy
glad you used em
others may
removed also

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Gracy

Wed, 2021-04-07 14:46

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Emotional as well as a joyfull read. I have no tissue handy, so tears are running down my cheeks...lol.
Seriously, another good poem from you, as usual.
All the best, Gracy

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lovedly

Wed, 2021-04-07 16:07

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you help me maintain my stance
while many come and simply glance
take a fleeting chance

damn from lovedly
no romance
a poem in advance

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emilya'spoetry

Thu, 2021-04-15 18:13

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You got ME right in the heart. For a second, I thought you were referencing that girl on American Idol that sang about her dad with him watching, and it was a very emotional moment for all involved, but when I saw "dying" dad, I knew it wasn't (I wanna say he had just recovered from alcoholism). What show was this?

JazzyGurl Emilee A.

lovedly

Thu, 2021-04-15 19:57

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same show I saw on tv recently
I changed the title
Someone liked this
but later mentioned
the guy really died .
So i couldn't then cry
She was naturally emotional
she won

so she cried
the audience also
I hope you liked it
what an irony maybe

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