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IF I WERE NOT TO BE

Submitted by lovedly on Sun, 2021-04-04 20:24

After an audition I did see
everyone crying even me

Singing a song
for a dying daddy
and
he besides mommy
also weeping

Oh what a grave situation can it be
have you ever imagined
so let me see
I still here be

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

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Geezer

Mon, 2021-04-05 07:45

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been as perceptive as Teddy, and might have thought that it was an actual funeral. Whatever. I did appreciate the fact that it was emotional. Nice job! ~ Geez.
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lovedly

Mon, 2021-04-05 20:03

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May read please both versions
and apply the yardstick
of emotion

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lovedly

Mon, 2021-04-05 20:01

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as a challenge
now posted neo permitted

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