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Gone as a wisp of air
Frantically searching for month after month
giving up hope of ever finding you
how does one deal with being a forgotten dream
only solution is to move on
move on yes to what end
After months of searching
all hope became lost
vanished ,just vanished
like a wisp of wind or a puff of smoke
Move on ,yes move on
go forward
and this was done
finding one that loved for the sake of love
loved for the sake of hearth and home
But soon too soon gone
just gone in a blink of an eye
or a short breath
gone
So now what asks the questioner
now what
where from here
is one to go
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Comments
scribbler
Tue, 2021-03-30 20:08
hoe or how in line 3?
T o to in next line? First line last stanza asks instead of ask.......Ok so much for typos lol. To find love then lose it must be a terrible thing.
c lynn brooks
Wed, 2021-03-31 14:54
Stan
Thank you typos fixed
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c lynn brooks
Wed, 2021-03-31 14:58
Teddy
thank you my friend. Stan had pointed the typos out I have repaired them
hmmm title isn't strong enough? Let me think on that a bit thanks for taking the time to readyour in put is always appreciated
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c lynn brooks
Wed, 2021-03-31 16:17
eddy
Is this any better
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scribbler
Thu, 2021-04-01 18:07
Title?
Well I like short titles....maybe....Errant Wisp?