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self

Clearer the thought,
deeper the soul,
more original I am,
the lonelier I become.

Style / type: 
Free verse
Last few words: 
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Rc0jyQgbxqQ&t=375s
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Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

Comments

chosen a different title, The one that you used, didn't seem to match the thought behind the poem. Maybe; something like
Introvert? Anyway, I can see how one could become lonelier as they look deeper into themselves, ignoring the outside world.
I am usually into short works, but this one just begs for a little more. Welcome to Neo. I know that you have been here at the site for more than a week or two, but I haven't had occasion to comment on anything you have done thus far. So again, Welcome to Neo. ~ Geezer.
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There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.

I’ll look forward to reading what you post here.

Nice short piece... perhaps needs a bit more of something to chew on for we readers? I liked what you have there.

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