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Sunrise Sunset On Your Demise

Submitted by Barbara Writes on Wed, 2021-03-10 00:01

The sunshine, in your eyes
shines brightly, before your demise
quietly, your smile declines
sunlight no longer strives.

the family did not know, a better you, hide
behind everyday struggles, and trials
the children forsook service, your graveside
as you observe from on high.

so, give your flowers now, while alive
before your sunset dies.

Last few words: 
a poem from the heart at what I saw when a family can't get it right before they die
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

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Ray Whitaker

Wed, 2021-03-10 11:25

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Thank you for posting this

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Barbara Writes

Wed, 2021-03-10 23:42

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glad you like

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Barbara Writes

Wed, 2021-03-10 23:43

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im glad you like it. I made the change . it sound good

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