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Journey Continues

Submitted by lovedly on Sun, 2021-03-07 21:14

As life flows like a river
the banks also give way.
no boats man comes even closer
as much as to share
a minuscule hand with care

Life gradually surges on
the speed of the heart hastens
is the estuary yet far away
someone say
mind beckons

the river of love hastens
to merge with its mom ocean
do they submerge tonight
let us see
it never happens

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Editing - rough draft
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

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Lavender

Sun, 2021-03-07 22:26

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Hello, Lovedly,
Sometimes I have to read your poetry a few times to interpret what it means to me - this feels lonely to me. But it is quite beautiful, especially your title and the simile of the river.
Thank you,
L

lovedly

Mon, 2021-03-08 10:23

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the loneliness of the last days on to unknown heavenly ways ----as rivers delays
be happy most of it yet is poetry
did u read my sonnet yet
tnx

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Lavender

Mon, 2021-03-08 10:36

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Yes, I did! Just commented!
Thank you!
L

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