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Prey
You, the fire, intent on burning it all
with the heat of a blue-white flame
aimed at my kindling heart
There is no comfort for me here
Where love was sought
I found wolves at the door
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Last few words:
An exercise in brevity, inspired by a recent poem by Teddy. Although, the living of this was far from brief, LOL!
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Bukowski, Billy Collins
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Lavender
Mon, 2021-02-22 23:41
Prey
Hello, Michael,
I believe you when you say that the living of this was far from brief - I feel the agony and great heartache. Pretty intense language used in the brevity of your poem. Very good.
Thank you!
L
Michael Anthony
Fri, 2021-02-26 12:16
Appreciate your comments L!
Appreciate your comments L! This one took longer to write than some of my longer pieces. So few words, they all had to be right. Glad you enjoyed it!
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Michael Anthony
author commentTeddy15
Tue, 2021-02-23 05:57
Dear Michael
wow, you made me gasp, 2 very strong stanza's i especially like your last line, the imagery is so visual and powerful, i think you have definately achieved it. it's one of my favourite ways of writing short yet full. moreover its really beautiful.
i feel really humbled, thank you.
Thank you...Teddy
Michael Anthony
Fri, 2021-02-26 12:14
Thanks T! I wasn't sure about
Thanks T! I wasn't sure about the last stanza, as the "wolves at the door" phrase is a bit of a cliché metaphor. I tried several variations, but kept coming back the original. Just seemed to work best.
Best
Michael Anthony
author commentTeddy15
Fri, 2021-02-26 14:32
Wolves at the door
Dear Michael,
It's a brilliant end, I never care personally about cliché this sits beautiful, as you have heard from others. I may come knocking at your door some day when it's hot looking for a fan! LoL I still love that one. Michael you are a glutton for punishment dear!
Thank you...Teddy
c lynn brooks
Tue, 2021-02-23 08:54
Michel
wonderful write. "aimed at my kindling heart" that is one powerful line
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Michael Anthony
Fri, 2021-02-26 12:16
Thank you for sharing your
Thank you for sharing your thoughts Chrys!
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Michael Anthony
author commentGeezer
Tue, 2021-02-23 09:19
I could see...
your smiling face as you opened the door; expecting to receive a comforting hug and kiss, but meeting the snarling face of reality. Awesome!
~ Geez.
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Michael Anthony
Fri, 2021-02-26 12:18
You have captured the mental
You have captured the mental vision I still have of this time quite well Geez - thank you!
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Michael Anthony
author commentGracy
Tue, 2021-02-23 21:21
Hello Michael, this is a true
Hello Michael, this is a true exercise in brevity. It's powerful and beautifully written. I love the last lines "when love was sought I found wolves at the door." That imagery is awesome.
Enjoyed, Gracy
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Michael Anthony
Fri, 2021-02-26 12:20
Thank you for the visit Gracy
Thank you for the visit Gracy! This was an interesting write for me. Trying to condense a toxic relationship into a couple of stanzas was an interesting challenge. Glad it seems to have worked.
Cheers
Michael Anthony
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