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Call Waiting...
The tiny light speeds on and on
Streaking away from our galaxy
In darkest space, far from dawn
Bringing news of you and me
Greetings and glad tidings too
Read my plaque, decipher it
Figuring out what to do
Wipe away the journey's grit
A message that was tossed in space
To far away and never
Now may you look upon our face
Our boldest venture ever
To find new life or is it old
Are we all alone?
We look about our universe cold
Waiting by the phone
What if the message comes too late
And we are not at home
What if we've met an untimely fate
While our messenger still roams?
We need to know, are we alone?
UFO's don't say
They just streak by, miss our comfort zone
So please call us today
Style / type:
Structured: Western
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Last few words:
For my friend that got hit by a flying saucer!
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Not Explicit Content
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Comments
Geezer
Sat, 2021-02-20 17:39
Watch out...
He may be a flying, purple, people-eater! I've heard of those! If he starts to fly; just run or shove some food in his mouth!
LoL ~ Geez.
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Ray Whitaker
Sat, 2021-02-20 21:05
i am reminded of Don Henley's song
"They're not here, They're not coming"... off the "Inside Job" album, came out in 2000.
Love the concept of your piece.
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Geezer
Sun, 2021-02-21 09:40
Thanks...
One of life's great mysteries, is why we haven't heard from any other life forms, in our present generation? I do believe that they visit all the time. Maybe they avoid open contact, because they are scared of their crazy neighbors? After all, we aren't the friendliest folks. We regularly kill each other over some really stupid crap! [You looked at my girlfriend wrong, you stepped on my sneakers, I don't feel like working for a living and my all time favorite; I hate your politics!] Thanks for the read and comments. BTW I love that album! ~ Geez.
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c lynn brooks
Sun, 2021-02-21 18:30
Geezer
All I can say is wtf have you been smoking SHARE
Chrys
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Geezer
Mon, 2021-02-22 05:48
You know...
I only smoke the best stuff, if I'm going to ruin what's left of my lungs, it may as well be the best! I would share, but there are laws against sending that kind of thing through the mail! ~ Gee.
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lovedly
Sun, 2021-02-21 21:40
We have landed our toy
on MARS OUR INTELLIGENCE
No fu-king UFO- nor aliens
no one knows
stopped us or challenged us so
believe in me we alone exist
micro bacteria may in planets
which about the sun go
GEE ur brilliant
you ought to know
aliens and UFOS don't glow
lol
nor humans
BLOW we now all ought to know
Geezer
Mon, 2021-02-22 06:02
Just because...
they haven't tried to stop us, challenge us or say hello, doesn't mean that they aren't out there. Like I said, they are probably scared to death; that we will turn on them to take the heat from our world. I didn't say that aliens and/or UFO's glow, although
some people say they do. I was mentioning the probe Voyager. [I'm not sure that there is a light on that either]. Just a way to show that it is very far from us, all alone in deep space. How can you say; that in among all the stars and galaxies, there is no other life? Are you so egotistic, that you believe we are the only intelligent life? There are a billion-trillion stars and planets out there; just on that basis alone, there has to be something/someone else. Just because you can't see it doesn't mean that it isn't out there. ~ Geez.
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Geezer
Mon, 2021-02-22 06:34
I wish...
that we had emoticons we could use here. I would give you two thumbs up! ~ Geez.
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lovedly
Mon, 2021-02-22 11:53
Thanks for the hammer
hence with u i shall be calmer
you alone are my Reader
lol
Geezer
Mon, 2021-02-22 09:47
Thank you...
But I'm afraid that you've blown your cover now. Your camouflage was working so well too! ~ Geez.
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Geezer
Mon, 2021-02-22 10:03
Before someone...
leaves me a message about the probe, I have looked up the NASA index of probes and have since discovered that my memory was faulty and the ones that have the plaque are not Voyagers, but the two Pioneer probes, [both of which we have lost contact with, years ago.]
There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.
lovedly
Mon, 2021-02-22 11:59
The Night is Still Young
GEEZ
JUST forget those blind aliens
have u read my poem
enjoi it lol
The Night is Still Young
it has night has turned over etc
same story....
Lavender
Mon, 2021-02-22 13:26
Call Waiting...
Hi Geezer,
Never-ending, vast glorious space! Daring and bold! I would hate to find out that we were not home when the call came. Yes! to this fun and thought-provoking poem!
Thank you!
L