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A Poem - A Villanelle
A poem bares the nature of your soul.
Within each word, a part of you revealed
in longing thoughts, deep yearnings to extol.
When single words attach to shape a whole,
intent and meaning no longer concealed,
a poem bares the nature of your soul.
Each phrase, each sentence eager to unroll
onto a warm blank page, willing to yield
in longing thoughts, deep yearnings to extol.
When tame words become wild and lose control,
resounding feelings conquered and annealed,
a poem bares the nature of your soul.
Your grievances may be hard to console,
yet words permit your sorrows to be healed
in longing thoughts, deep yearnings to extol.
The pen delights, as in a graceful stroll,
like an ambled walk through a fragrant field.
A poem bares the nature of your soul
in longing thoughts, deep yearnings to extol.
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Comments
lovedly
Mon, 2021-02-15 22:25
A poem bares the nature of your soul.
EXCELLENTLY DONE
I CAN FEEL THE Syllables count
only one suggestion
as per Dylan
the title must be your first line
may ask Alan
A poem bares the nature of your soul.
Lavender
Tue, 2021-02-16 07:58
Hello, Lovedly
Thank you for your encouragement with this form! I'm sure it will need tweaking here and there!
L
Lavender
Tue, 2021-02-16 10:25
Interesting...
because that line sets the mood and theme for the entire poem. I have wondered before why the word "good" was used to describe the night.
Thank you, Alan!
L
Lavender
Tue, 2021-02-16 11:06
Hi, Alan
I do read it differently! It is much more tender and intimate now. For me, it brings their relationship into the forefront, instead focusing on inevitable death. A great thing about poetry - digging in and discovering hidden gems!
Thank you!
L
Lavender
Tue, 2021-02-16 11:27
Thank you, Alan!
I appreciate your help and enthusiasm! Words - very exciting little beings!
Thank you!
L
Lavender
Tue, 2021-02-16 08:01
Hi, Teddy
A bit of a challenge, but very much fun, actually. May need to adjust a little.
Thank you for reading and helping me!
L
Lavender
Tue, 2021-02-16 09:53
Hi, Alan
Yes! Getting the correct syllable count and rhyme and refrain is very satisfying! It is rewarding to extend the challenge - like putting together a puzzle. I'm sure I'll look this over again for a better word here or there, or a better flow within the stanzas. Thank you for the title education! Very interesting. While most of the time it seems the title draws the reader into the poem, for me it also wraps the poem in a theme, along with the final line. I'm enjoying getting to know this wonderful form!
Thank you for your help!
L
chima ononogbu
Tue, 2021-02-16 17:22
Beautiful poem
The piece is excellent.
Bathe yourself with poetry and let the world go to pieces.
Lavender
Tue, 2021-02-16 17:30
Hello, Chima
I appreciate your very kind words!
L
VanRyan
Tue, 2021-02-16 21:58
Hi Lavender,
I find your poem quite astonishing; so well done. Brava. Love it! Jerry
Lavender
Tue, 2021-02-16 22:00
Hi, Jerry
Always grateful for your generous comments!
Thank you!
L