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Rulingclass... [February contest]

Submitted by Geezer on Tue, 2021-02-09 07:48

The ruling-class is not in session
Too many students are absent-minded
Forget and forgive me, if I don't remember
See? No rules to memorize; makes it easy

i couldnot agree more
if you wanted me two
but ill try
it jist for you

Is this broken English man?
Sounds reasonable
but one can never be sure
Whatever happened to rhyme and reason?

We r closer then whatever finish
Like scraping the surface
to find the gold
on a bar of lead

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction): 
What did you think of my title?
Editing stage: 
Editing - polished draft
Contest: 
Just Write Poetry Contest
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

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Lavender

Tue, 2021-02-09 09:26

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It's too early in the morning for me to be wearing such a gigantic grin... This is so Geezerly good! My favorite line: "We r closer then whatever finish." (I can see myself using that line on a daily basis for so many reasons.) You certainly brought it - great write!
Thank you, and good luck!
L
(You may want to take a peek at Taylor Mali's "The the Impotance of Proofreading." Warning: it has explicit language. Apologies in advance if you choose to watch.)

Geezer

Tue, 2021-02-09 17:29

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Taylor Mali and he's great! I wish I could do slam-poetry and speak without notes. It's a talent that would serve me well, but, my memory is shot and if I read at an open mike night, I need my poem there in front of me. Yeah, use that ljne whenever you wish and then if anyone asks; [Where the hell did you get that from?] you can say that you got it from this Guy that you know. Thanks for your read and comments, they r the touch of my day. ~ Geez.
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Geezer

Tue, 2021-02-09 17:42

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thing that makes one think of the accent being on the locals. And yes, you are funny! ~ Geez.
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