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Hurry Sundown

Hurry Sundown

Daylight shows every line
every callous
every sc ar
and every tear

Hurry sundown
hide all traces
of past love and past regrets

Sunlight shows more
than people want to see
let me live in obscurity

Hurry sundown
hide all traces
of love gained
then lost
of a lifetime
of tears,fears and longing

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Nice piece put together with exceptional poetic rhymes. Though I don't believe love can exist outside the convenience of money and romance, I still enjoy reading and writing moving love poems. Good one Lynn.

Bathe yourself with poetry and let the world go to pieces.

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Great lines; indeed, the light of day shows the truth that many seek to hides. Jerry/van

Thank for your kind words

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Thank you so much my friend

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Hello, Chrys,
Sometimes the night does give us the relief of seeing our heartaches and the truth - well said.
Thank you, and take care.
L

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got away from me! Don't know how I missed it!
Only one little crit! I would make the line [" Past love and old regrets"] Other than that, this is a tale that most have experienced, but aren't able to write about like you have. ~ Geez.
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I'd wondered when you would get around to reading this as it has been a long time coming thanks for the cudos
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indeed...hurry sundown!

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Yes Hurry Sundown
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