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As the last petals fall
She was my Rose
Her sweet smile
And perfumed skin
Were her beauty
I shed a tear
As her hand slipped from mine
For the very last time
The moment was both
Relief and Anger
How could she have suffered so?
In what world
Should she have felt so much pain?
Don't get me wrong
She was here until her last breath
But she wasn't aware
Even though I was with her
Twenty-four hours a day
I was alone, alone
My eyes open wide
We were in Hell on Earth
Her own body was her enemy
In the end
And as I place her
Pink flowery nightgown to rest
In her favourite set of drawers
For the very last time
I shall forever be grateful she was here
I shall be forever grateful she was my Rose.
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Florence (Italy)
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Those who have the courage to inspire, Oscar Wilde, Dante Alighieri and William Blake, are definately amongst my favourites.
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Lavender
Wed, 2021-01-13 12:52
As The Last Petals Fall
Hello, Teddy,
Soft and lovely. Personal, but shared in a very giving way. The ending is especially tender, as it feels actually unlike an ending, but an appreciation that will go on forever. Beautiful.
Thank you,
L
Teddy15
Wed, 2021-01-13 12:53
Dear lavender
You have exactly described what I wanted the reader to take away, I'm forever grateful you are here. X
Thank you...Teddy
author commentLavender
Wed, 2021-01-13 13:17
Beautiful poetry, Teddy
I felt your tenderness all the way through...
L
Rula
Wed, 2021-01-13 14:36
Tender it is
It reflects the poetess sensetivity.
I know many who can relare to this piece and I am not an exception dear teddy
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Teddy15
Wed, 2021-01-13 14:48
Dear Rula
Thank you for your beautiful words. X
Thank you...Teddy
author commentscribbler
Wed, 2021-01-13 14:42
Hi ted
The emotion is all conveyed
Teddy15
Wed, 2021-01-13 14:49
Dear Stan
Lovely to see you here on one of my more serious writes. Most appreciated X
Thank you...Teddy
author commentMichael Anthony
Thu, 2021-01-14 00:28
Wow Teddy! Very heartfelt and
Wow Teddy! Very heartfelt and moving piece. I'm so sorry for the loss of the loved one this must be about.
"Her own body was her enemy In the end" This line really hit home for me - painfully beautiful!
Thank you.
Michael Anthony
Teddy15
Thu, 2021-01-14 00:54
Dear Michael
It's always such a pleasure to see you, I was inspired to write this although I have lost like everyone has I was just putting my shoes in empathy for this, but thank you for your very kind words. X
Thank you...Teddy
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