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Another miracle might happen

Submitted by Dandini on Tue, 2021-01-12 13:34

Who says miracles never happen? Who?
Who says they are just for the privileged few?
Believe me when I tell you I met an angel
And it was just like a real fairy tale.

With her wings of love and friendship,
Maybe she came down from the blue sky up above,
Bringing the best of both heaven and earth;
And the light of innocence shone with love.

I am thankful she came into my life that day,
But I failed to recognise the need for trust;
And her warm smile made me come alive
But I threw it away and my life fell into dust.

So maybe one day life will be worth living again
And maybe another miracle will be given to me.
The next time I shall not be the idiot that I was,
Always striving for more than anyone can hope for..

Editing stage:

Editing - polished draft

Content level:

Not Explicit Content

Comments

Geezer

Tue, 2021-01-12 18:00

I was...

busily humming along with your irregular rhyme scheme and wham! I was hit with the ending of your poem. It makes sense, I like the thought, but it just doesn't rhyme! How about seeing what you can do to fix it? ~ Geez.
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Ray Whitaker

Wed, 2021-01-13 09:53

"Idiot" out of place

Just my opinion.

I like the piece a lot. well written,

I agree with Geezer above...

However don't like the word idiot in there. You are writing about an intelligent person in the piece.

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Dandini

Wed, 2021-01-13 12:38

Dear Geezer & Ray

Dear Geezer & Ray
Thank you for your comments.

PS I don't do rhyme!
Not usually anyway.

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Teddy15

Wed, 2021-01-13 12:45

Dear Dandini

I'm going to have a crack at this even though you put as a polished draft. I totally agree with Ray (idiot) is totally out of the theme. I challenge you to make this a timeless poem
I adore angel poems and this is just beautiful in the sense its as much about an Angel as it is about any women. You have given such beauty to her. May I say look at it without the entire last stanza. You might suprise yourself to see how different it can sound. Take care and Happy New Year.

Thank you...Teddy

Lavender

Wed, 2021-01-13 15:03