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Gravestone

Submitted by Dandini on Thu, 2020-12-31 20:46

O cold and icy moon
I foresee your light
Shining in the night
Casting a shadow
On my own waiting gravestone.

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Lavender

Thu, 2020-12-31 21:20

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Hello, Dandini,
I noticed you used "foresee", as in predicting or to know beforehand. But then I also felt that you were actually physically there in the moonlight, overshadowing your own grave. Either way, this is rich and deep in thought, and yet very simple and honest.
Thank you so much,
Lavender

Asche Keegan

Fri, 2021-01-01 03:08

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Ooooooh, this sent shivers down my spine! Great imagery. :)

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Dandini

Fri, 2021-01-01 11:48

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Thank you!
To Lavender and Asche.

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