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Extended Christmas Cookies...

Christmas Past is nagging me
"Remember... you did this?"
I say yeah, I think I do
But, I don't think that they're still pissed

I've been a real good guy now
For a lot of years
No escapades with women
I can't even have a beer

"But, it's such fun to remind you
Of the words you did not keep
Of the things that you have done
You should be losing sleep"

A fading light and poof, he was gone
I settled down to sleep
"Ahem" I heard, "Are you awake"?
Now I'm just about to weep!

The Present sat across from me
"Don't I have my chance"?
I thought that we were settled
So what's your song and dance?

"If you really want some peace of mind
There are things that you can do"
Yeah, like what? I said crossly
"Well, there are a few"

"Tell people that you're sorry
Make apologies
Go out and donate time
To some refugees"

You know what? I said; I'm done!
I got nothing more for you
I'll deal with all this later
Now, it's time for you to cruise

You guys give me ulcers
I don't want to have the spirit
And as for Christmas cheer
I don't want to hear it

And so the dawn is breaking
I didn't get much sleep
And I'm lying here awake
Thinking thoughts so deep

Ahhhh... Screw this Christmas spirit
I'm sleeping in today
No presents or apologies
That's all I got to say

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I had a good time with it. If you get a theme in your head and the rhythm is good, it just seems to come easy. Sometimes, it's hard to stop! I'm glad you like it and had a chuckle or two. Yeah, I won't try too hard to convince ou of my bad-boy status, but there were times... On that note, I think I will go get some egg-nog and a bit of that Guyanese rum that my landlord brought us when he came back from vacation, to his country. Nice mellow stuff, an amber rum that is so smooth! ~ Geez.
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With you all the way!
except the" saying sorry" bit.
still, its nice to reminisce
afore we --- take that last - shit.

Obi.

( You're right, this has good rhythm.)

is not what I really am about. I just threw that in there to be more Scrooge-like. Thanks for the visit, nice to see you. ~ Geez.
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No escapades with women
who r u wanning 2 believe it

a man smiles at anyall women
even at a she dog
as one wants to die

S M I L I N G
LOL Nice one Gee
keep smiling with me/// but read my last one //no first

I am all smiles at the women, but nothing more than that. Since I've married, there hasn't been anyone other than my wife.
~ Geez.
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she is still with you a loyalty
royalty prize award congrats
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Love this "hide nothing" poem.

I frequently "let it all hang out!" ~ Geezer.
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I've got it figured out now. I left out the beginning stanza before. I put it back in and took out another, because it didn't seem to really relate to the rest of the poem. Now how does it read? I do have quotation marks around the 'others' part of the conversation. Is it better? ~ Geez.
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I made it better, but it was done just as it should be, with the help of my fellow poets! Thank you. ~ Geez.
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