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Submitted by whitetea on Sat, 2020-12-12 06:00

We
Linger
Breath is heard
Static carries

We
Pause

We trade
Acknowledgement
Bonded yet solitary

Confirm
It's time

And
Disconnect

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
Please use care (this is a sensitive subject for me, do not critique harshly)
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

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Geezer

Sat, 2020-12-12 08:22

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that I get it. As another said recently, we are alone and solitary, except for the people that we communicate with through the internet. "Writing in solitary rooms that we will never see". Have we let ourselves become too dependent on electronic communication and faraway neighbors? Should we disconnect and re-engage on a more personal level? I'm not sure. I definitely would miss many of my friends in faraway places. I think it also gives us the option of dis-engagment when we tire of the obligation of making polite conversation; when you would rather be doing something else. LoL Don't we all have at least one personal relationship that when we see them coming or get them on the phone, we say to ourselves; "Oh crap! ? BTW welcome back ~ Geezer.
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Obadiah Grey

Sun, 2020-12-13 10:41

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I like that you have left a little room for the reader to draw upon their own interpretation.
Will read more of you.

Obi.

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