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One Wish

If you only had one wish, what would it be. To ride on a dragon, or be lonely but free. Will it be to sing for people, or stand for what’s right. To dance the night away, or to stand and fight. Some wishes come true, but the best of all. Is that you get back up, when you fall. If I had one wish, I know what it would be. To go to heaven, with people around me. To go to God, and say a prayer. That he will be my light, and he will always be there. In the falling of the dark, there is a light. To the ones that fought, for what was right. There may be times where we are scared. Like a cornered rat, that is not fair. But we can be heroes too, just wait and see. There’s a blessing for you, just come and find me. There upon the hill, is where he sits. The voices of heaven are heard, and the torches are lit. There may be small problems, but we know what to do. Because God who heals, always comes through.

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I dont really have any critiques, just wanted to say awesome job!

That is okay that you don't have any wishes now. But you will have some in the future.

<p>Sparkle</p>

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Hey by any chance do you play Roblox with that same username you have on here?

<p>Sparkle</p>

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I dont lol

Thank you for the help.

<p>Sparkle</p>

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