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The Heart Of The World
I regretted everyday that I never forget. It's easy to be afraid, but it's hard to relent. There's a shadow in this world that covers me whole. It stabs my brain, it hurts my soul. Where people in this world is dying with pain, of the journey is long and and there's nothing to gain. The feeling in my soul never revived, because I am dead, no longer alive. Where you do what you want to do, no longer a sleep. There is nothing here that is worth anymore to keep. So why do I feel the need to stay, in this world of disorder, hurt, and dismay. It's the people in this world that matters the most, but I've been sleeping here here like I'm a ghost. The things I want most, leaves a scar. I don't remind myself who we are. We are not the people we are the perspective. And if you can't see this, you may be rejective. So please listen to me, when I say. There is hope in our perspective, and a brighter day.
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Here is the feel in my soul, of what I have become.
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Sparkle90
Tue, 2020-12-08 08:58
Thank you
Thank you Teddy15, I would like that very much that you could edit some things in here. I don't have a very big vocabulary and I need something that means something and also people can understand.
<p>Sparkle</p>
author commentSparkle90
Tue, 2020-12-08 09:01
Thank you
Thank you for pointing out those errors and to get me help with my work. I will certainly take that into consideration for all my future poems.
<p>Sparkle</p>
author commentlovedly
Mon, 2020-12-07 17:20
Incredible 12 Years Poet!!!!
I regret everyday
that I never forget.
It's easy to be afraid,
but it's hard to relent.
There's a shadow in this world
that covers me all
It stabs my brain,
it hurts me sole
people in this world are dying with pain,
journey is long and there's not much to gain.
The feeling in me needs to be revived
because I am nearly dead,
no longer alive
where one would do
what one wants to
no longer staying asleep
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NOW TRY THIS*
SIMILARLY IF YOU WISH
OR SCORE OUT ALL
YOUR WISH
YOUNG MAN
*(There is nothing here that is worth anymore to keep. So why do I feel the need to stay, in this world of disorder, hurt, and dismay. It's the people in this world that matters the most, but I've been sleeping here here like I'm a ghost. The things I want most, leaves a scar. I don't remind myself who we are. We are not the people we are the perspective. And if you can't see this, you may be rejective. So please listen to me, when I say. There is hope in our perspective, and a brighter day.)
Sparkle90
Tue, 2020-12-08 09:10
Yay!
Thank you for making my poem like this because to be honest I don't not know how to put the poems in stanzas. Thank you for doing this and will take your advice.
Love- Sparkle
<p>Sparkle</p>
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