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MY SUPERMOM

My mom is super, her name is Donna, She made me, taught me, raised me, loves me, cares for me, helps me, talks to me, visits me. Without her I wouldn’t be living this wonderful life, and I am grateful for her. She also gave me a sister who I am also grateful for, I would be lonely without my sister. My supermom helps my wonderful grandpa who I am also grateful for. I wouldn’t be inspired to join the military if I didn’t meet or know my grandpa. I hope I can live with them so I can be truly happy.

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I am Melbourne Tyler I am 15 years old and in a group home I have been in a group home since I was 8 my father has abused me a lot as a young kid my mom moved me out of there for her, my sister, and I's safety. So I appreciate her and am so grateful to have a mom
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what we would call prose, than a poem, but don't let that stop you. I enjoyed your description of your mom and your family.
I don't know how much time that you have to use a computer or how much time you have on sites like ours, but if you really are interested in how to write poetry, ask a counsler or someone close to you to help you find things to read about being a poet. I find your gratefulness to your mom and grandfather most refreshing and I will be watching for more from you. Good luck. ~ Geezer.
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