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Why?

I left your city while crying,
When I saw your arms in someone else's hand,
At some some point you broken up with me and making fun of my voice,
Earlier you left me like a thrash and you were feeling alright,
But now you really need me in your life,
Just tell me why?...

At point my loved ones left me alone,
But today they all want me,
Earlier they used to rub their hand while doing a handshake with me,
But now they cuddle me,
Now everyone see that my life is going great and fine,
Now everyone really need me in their life,
Just tell me why?...

God blessed me with their blessings,
That's why I am capable to do the things,
Schrey has now aware of people as how they think,
Now he lives in his own life,
At some point people started betraying him in his life,
But now they want him back in their life,
Just tell him why?...

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Dear Shrey, your poem makes me stumble in some verses, so I'll return to read it again with more time. Must rush now.
I'll be back, Gracy

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"My soul is painted like the wings of butterflies; fairy tales of yesterday will grow but never die, I can fly, my friends.” – Freddie Mercury

Very heartwarming. Sometimes they don't need are see the value in you until you start doing well.

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Thank you

Schrey
Life is so small so do something special.

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