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My love is like a flower

Submitted by Dandini on Mon, 2020-11-23 12:38

What enchantment lies
In the awakening of a flower!
Laughter or tears
It all throbs with love!
The whole meadow
Is carpeted with colour
And my heart beats
Like a trapped butterfly!

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Editing - rough draft
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Not Explicit Content

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Dandini

Tue, 2020-11-24 20:41

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Thank you so much

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Geezer

Wed, 2020-11-25 10:34

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whole-heartedly with Teddy. Very nice and truly romantic. I also agree with the suggestionmm of using the word flutter. Makes it sou nd more in keeping with a butterfly! Again, welcome to Neo. ~ Geezer.
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Dandini

Wed, 2020-11-25 11:03

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A kind welcome.

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