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Siena Sunshine

Beyond the center of Siena
That sits upon a hill
Where the piazza filled with pigeons
And people enjoying the views

I found myself
Consumed with joy
Winter’s sunshine
Caressing my soul
Montepulciano, was the place
Panoramic views, seen for miles and miles

A small piece of magic,
That sits beyond Siena’s wall
A freeze frame moment was captured
The sun was falling fast
Colors that you’ve only dreamed
They were there, filling the sky
Blues and pinks and landscape of sparkling greens

Romantic moment caught my mind
I stuck a kiss on my lover’s lips
A new memory, taken with the help of
Siena’s sunshine.

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Free verse
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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I dedicate this to a gentleman called Alan.
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you are so sweet sending (un bacio per te) this is actually a memory of exactly a year ago , i went on a short trip for two days but it was truly something i shall not forget. scenery is outstanding throughout Italy, i am just really lucky to live close to this particular zone.

Thank you...Teddy

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May the sun shine on you today and I hope you enjoy a wonderful Saturday lunch time.

Thank you...Teddy

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I've been over for the Palio a couple of times but visited often on less hectic days. September 2018 last time. I think that the sun always shines on Siena.

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The palio is hard to get into, you should be really lucky to find tickets and is full of pasticcio, when there is everyone, but I know it to be a splendid atmosphere because I've visited the days before, unfortunately this year there wasn't one, of course crowds weren't the best idea. But hopefully will be held once more. You were very lucky to see such a sight, of course as a tourist it's a must. X

Thank you...Teddy

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for the Palio was 1975. The Piazza del Campo was packed shoulder to shoulder (as you know) and the heat was awesome. I travelled all that way to see the three lap horse race lasting about one and a half minutes. The second time was 1987 but I travelled from Lipica, Yugoslavia (now Croatia) that time. Siena is a really beautiful place isn't it?

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For me Siena, has never been my favourite place it's overshadowed with tall buildings much like London, but I see the attraction especially the palio, It really is magic, i actually put my high-heels on the racecourse one time and all I could do is laugh. I'm not much of a gambler But yes it's an amazing place and time
In 1975, it must have been a dream because Italy in the 70's I know was a fab place to be, I often watch comedy films of that era, they are so damn funny amici miei is one of faves actually filmed in Florence in the 60's
Thanks for your time dear Alan.

Thank you...Teddy

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Bloomin phone

Thank you...Teddy

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A good poem but when describing something it's often the little details that matter. What type hill? gentle or craggy. Describe the people and say whether the pigeons were flying or feeding. The more detail the more you draw the reader in.

I was trying to describe Montepulciano it's a beautiful hilltop village in the region of Siena, I wasn't going for the piazza of Siena as such. That's why I didn't go into it but I shall take your advice for next time. Thank you so much. I think I was trying to be romantic with the scenery that was surrounding me. LOL me romantic? ...

Thank you...Teddy

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Which is more romantic? He kissed me or His full kips approached my yearning lips and when they finally met my heart melted? Details...... But don't get me wrong, I liked your poem

I planted a kiss upon my lovers lips, lol I'm thrilled you like this I really didn't think it would be a hit! I'm so pleased.

Thank you...Teddy

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the descriptions of scenery are good, and the lines well concieved; the line I love the most is: "I stuck a kiss on my lover's lips." Bravo! ~ Geez.
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Thank you, that was the line that was shaky for me, now you have made my day. I do think we should all take the opportunity to do that sometimes. Look at me being romantic! It was exactly how it happened I'm glad it came across.

Thank you...Teddy

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I love this, romantic in every sense, there is a mystery at the heart of it which I like very much, I don't know Italy, I went as a child, but only very briefly, but this was a real love letter to Siena. For me, this was perfect.

How lovely to see you, I'm chuffed that everyone has enjoyed this piece I was really lacking inspiration after my adventures of the past few weeks so I am so glad you came by. X

Thank you...Teddy

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