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Heart Rending Tribute All is Over

There is nothing that faith cannot achieve
some die young
some when old
thirst to

but no one ever dies
before one's time has come
when that will
no one knows

so pray and have faith in yourself
we all have come to go
as and when
no one knows
not even heaven

our dearest pet Flashy
passed away so suddenly
left us distraught
utterly lonely

so when alive
live a friendly life
rest only the distant horizon knows
if at all

when will my sun set
I don't know
do you

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Free verse
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Dear lovedly, how sad about your pet Flashy dying, That must have been a terrible shock to you and your family, unless it's fictional?
"Is it really true?
as and when
(but) no one knows not even heaven"

Just a small nit. All else is perfect. Sad but engaging. That's the merit of good poets. Best wishes, Gracy

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"My soul is painted like the wings of butterflies; fairy tales of yesterday will grow but never die, I can fly, my friends.” – Freddie Mercury

reality ma'am
thanks
its sad for all of us
Best wishes
RGDS

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is it Fate? Do you just die when your 'Time' comes? If that is so, I will remark upon it. My own belief is that when you have accomplished the things that you have come to this earth to do, THEN you will die. I believe in reincarnation, and that you will keep coming back to better your soul and make up for the things that you did wrong in the previous life. We all have flaws and when we come back in the next life, we face the same temptations to do the the things that we did in the other one. If your soul has learned from the last time, you will avoid making the same mistakes as you did before. You then climb the ladder to the next realm until you achieve Nirvana. ~ Geez.
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Every time we die
as and when
it's Nirvana
This is the saddest death I am facing
having encountered many ,
but
this one makes me believe
YES
there is rebirth in some
other form .
human or animal,

Of that in a composed minds poem....
shall enlighten all
the way they wish to believe
as you too do
do

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