Join the Neopoet online poetry workshop and community to improve as a writer, meet fellow poets, and showcase your work. Sign up, submit your poetry, and get started.

Identity Theft

Submitted by Viviana Smith on Mon, 2020-11-02 15:59

Can you find me?
Surrounded by fake identity
Who am I?
Who was I?
How to act?
How to love?
How to try to be normal?
Please help me!
One big question mark clothes me and darkness
What am I?
Where am I?
Who could I be?
Try to stay calm
But how
Lost all alone
What is my identity?

Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction): 
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Last few words: 
This is how I feel in high school. Trying to figure out who to be and what to act like.Who to hang with and who to avoid. Its really cool though how many of my friends have read this poem and got the message i was trying to convey.
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

Comments

Geezer

Fri, 2021-05-21 10:42

Geezer's picture
Volunteer badge

that I found this one! It reminded me of when I was in high-school, but was so sure of myself and that I didn't need anyone but my close circle of friends. Man, how much I deprived myself of! [But my main object was to avoid school as much as possible] and I didn't worry about the 'losers' that kept going to school. I didn't grow up until I was much older and got a GED and attended a couple of semesters of college. I know it sounds cliche, but just be you! You sound like you have your act together. I like the theme, your title drew me in and your pattern, word use and logic was good from beginning to end. ~ Geez.
.

There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.

Viviana Smith

Mon, 2021-05-24 11:39

Viviana Smith's picture

Thanks, I really tried to get that point across and i'm glad that you saw it!! U should check out my newest poem about rain if u haven't already!!

Kisses,
Vivi

author comment

Geezer

Mon, 2021-05-24 11:45

Geezer's picture
Volunteer badge

"Water's Embrace" Yes, I have read it and commented. ~ Geez.
.

There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.

(c) Neopoet.com. No copyright is claimed by Neopoet to original member content.