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Mountains That Move
At first glance the ground shivers
the trees sway and lift with ease
the seas align with the pattern of the sun
and to know -
true gifts are given in revelations
among the hopeless there's a man
sitting with bars and rails
and thus he goes -
attempting to change the pulse of the ground
to exchange negotiations with man
so the thoughts can prevail with vengeance
and thy mighty hands can protrude through
to ask - 'can mountains be moved'
believe the tale of lions and wolves
give heart and take strain -
no vast level is possible beyond air
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The Poetry Dude
Thu, 2020-10-29 03:12
Thank you for the comment
Thank you for the comment Teddy. And yes, it is ok to use initials. :)
Ray Whitaker
Wed, 2020-10-28 20:17
Welcome to the site!
Looking forward to reading more of your work.
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The Poetry Dude
Thu, 2020-10-29 03:13
Hey Ray
Thank you. I am eager to post more.