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Tonight

A sirens sounding,
My heart is pounding,
Anticipation is flowing
Through my veins.
No use fighting,
A feeling so exciting
Just let your heart take the reins..

Look into my eyes,
Don't look so surprised,
I've been watching you all night.
No time to hesitate,
Don't even speculate
Because I don't care
If it's wrong or right
tonight is the night.

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Yep I will take your advise and change it.
Thankyou

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I think you are right thankyou x

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Hello ECP, good poem. The others have already made the same suggestions that I would have.
The title, theme and spacing are fine. No more nits. Bring on more.
Gracy

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"My soul is painted like the wings of butterflies; fairy tales of yesterday will grow but never die, I can fly, my friends.” – Freddie Mercury

Thankyou so much x

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