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TRAVEL IS MUST
You are a very
intelligent teen
I had once been
travel makes us wild
and wisdom wise wide
you have that acumen
inculcated may be
to me it came naturally
so I ask all who read me
come
and
Abide With Me
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage:
Content level:
Not Explicit Content
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Comments
Lavender
Mon, 2020-10-19 18:46
Travel Is Must
Hi, Lovedly,
In most of your poems, I usually find a few words that could stand alone - a poem in and of themselves. "I ask all who read me, come and abide with me." I think that's exactly what most poets want and need.
Thank you,
L
lovedly
Tue, 2020-10-20 09:36
Hi
I'm not quite sure of what you mean Can you elaborate what is lacking in my poems pl Thanks
Lavender
Tue, 2020-10-20 12:18
Stand Alone Words
Hello, Lovedly
So sorry I wasn't clear. I meant that sometimes there are a few words within a poem that are so profound, they strike me as a poem by themselves. I didn't mean that the rest of the poem is lacking, just that "I ask all who read me, come and abide with me" really stood out and touched me.
Thank you!
L
lovedly
Tue, 2020-10-20 18:30
you two hold my hand
thanks