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Kite
Up in the heavens
Over this mortal plane...
Watch me glide with hovered wings.
I can feel the winds rush
Around this surreal fin
Of satin paper, wooden frame;
Lifting up my hollow skin.
Be my navigator.
The tides of the air restrict me.
Take my hand through the skies...
I can only fly by your gentle love strings.
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Dennis Go
Mon, 2011-02-14 09:49
Hi JayCee
I guess you've read it before I may have posted this on the old neo site. Just a little piece for the Valentines atmosphere. :)
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Dennis
"Death smiles on us all. All a man can do is smile back." ~ Maximus Decimus Meridius
Dennis Go
Mon, 2011-02-14 09:53
Hi Amal
Thanks for the advice I'll give it a thought. Changes in syllable counts tend to alter the whole piece's emotion and delivery. Thanks again :)
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Regards,
Dennis
"Death smiles on us all. All a man can do is smile back." ~ Maximus Decimus Meridius