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ANXIOUS Eh!

Await be not anxious mates
change your ancient thoughts
anaconda and apple
without any seed
how would you
as a creature now
or ever be

there would be no
buds nor flowers
in any valley
hope you are
applying your modern mind
as is being done
by those more rational now
of current scientific mankind
need one now you remind
the origins
since ages of humankind

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

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Dear lovedly, I confess that I don't quite understand the gist of your poem. There are also some grammatical bumps along the way. Sorry, not meaning to offend, but you say you want the raw truth.
I think that with a bit of tweaking it could become a lovely poem. All the best, Gracy

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"My soul is painted like the wings of butterflies; fairy tales of yesterday will grow but never die, I can fly, my friends.” – Freddie Mercury

as u say
i love frankness all my poetry is not diamonds

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Dear lovedly, none of us write diamond poetry! I love yours very much, just think they need a bit of tweaking, but that's just my opinion. All the best, Gracy

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"My soul is painted like the wings of butterflies; fairy tales of yesterday will grow but never die, I can fly, my friends.” – Freddie Mercury

shall more do
Gracy ma'am

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