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Ariel, the Thane of Wolverhampton

Submitted by Edna Sweetlove on Tue, 2020-09-22 16:22

Yesterday and today and again tomorrow
regrets build up from day to day
to the last moment of my waning life
and all my yesterdays have guided me
towards my longed for death, so up yours, brief candle.

Life's just a passing sideshow, poor interval
to fill in the time between TV shows and football -
so pass another beer - life's just a ragged tail
wagged by an idiot, it's fags and sex and booze -
and then there's sod all left.

Know you whichever tempestuous idiot declar'd
O wonder how many goodly creatures are there here
how beautious whining mankind be
O brave new bloody pointless world
that has such people in't or some such futility
needeth yet her brains examining forsooth
and has ne'er seen Wolverhampton ill-lit by moonlight.

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Last few words: 
In case you didn't recognise them, the quotes are from Macbeth and The Tempest.
Editing stage: 
Editing - polished draft
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

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Geezer

Wed, 2020-09-23 17:00

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you have expressed your regard for life on this plane! LoL
"And now, the accusation of the public
that withers your fruits upon the vine
As witnessed, by contempt, Hic* [Latin]
Proclaims all life devine.

Sorry, I couldn't resist.
Actually, I thought this rather good, but was puzzled by the word [in't]
is it a typo? ~ Geez.
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Edna Sweetlove

Wed, 2020-09-23 19:21

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... "in't" is a VERY poetic and olde worlde contraction of "in it"..

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Geezer

Thu, 2020-09-24 08:03

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that might be the case, but wasn't sure. ~ Geez.
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There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
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Edna Sweetlove

Thu, 2020-09-24 09:54

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... "How beauteous mankind is! O brave new world, that has such people in 't!”

I was merely quoting - Edna the Bard of Greenwich....

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Edna
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Breakinglogic

Sun, 2020-09-27 03:02

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Edna,
I'm coming back to this, having read it a few days ago—when I was wearied as a waterfall-wading widgeon—and I connected what I couldn't connect at the time.
I love all of it.
BTW, your VERY poetic use of "in't" did not go unnoticed and, in fact, owes me a new pair of pants.
I love all the archaic words. Yesterday I DESTROYED a friend in hangman using "forsooth."
Wonderful poem, much enjoyed!

☆ raffy

Edna Sweetlove

Sun, 2020-09-27 11:12

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...to hear of your trouser accident.
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Edna
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