Join the Neopoet online poetry workshop and community to improve as a writer, meet fellow poets, and showcase your work. Sign up, submit your poetry, and get started.
This Scornful Dissipation
Yes, I regret
The scornful dissipation
Of my salad days
When I was strong,
Believe me,
They didn’t last too long,
Yes, I regret
All that I squandered
O’er the course
Of about fifteen years,
Believe me,
I’ve cried quite a sea of tears,
Yes, I regret
If I e’er acted cavalierly
Towards any who sought to love me
With a trusting heart,
Believe me,
I’m not so proud of my past.
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage:
Content level:
Not Explicit Content
(c) Neopoet.com. No copyright is claimed by Neopoet to original member content.
Comments
Carl Halling
Sun, 2020-09-20 12:06
Hi Teddy...
You remembered! :) Yes, that's right, I also tightened it up a bit for the sake of more impact.
Carl Halling
Sun, 2020-09-20 13:44
Hi Teddy
I'm really pleased, I thought I could do more with this piece, thank you for saying so.
Unsub
Sun, 2020-09-20 12:35
It seems you’ve re-titles
It seems you’ve re-titles this from an original piece & all I can say is the title does draw the reader in.
I really liked the reminisce style of regrets that I’m sure we can all relate to.
You close with no being proud of your past but life is about learning & our mistakes make us stronger to be better going forward.
Thoughtful piece which I enjoyed.
Regards
Unsub.
"Problem-Reaction-Solution"
Carl Halling
Sun, 2020-09-20 13:48
Yes, I did...
Thank you, Unsub, I'm pleased the retitling gives new life to this piece. You are right of course, I do tend to let the regret get the better of me, rather than realise we all have them, and that we all have to learn from them to a greater or lesser extent, some a lot, some less so, according to the nature of our past. Thanks again. Carl.