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At a Long Lost Party

I yearned for another,
Who wasn’t you,
But she wasn’t there,
Unlike you,
At a long lost party
In old Cambridge town.

Did I fall
Just a little for you,
While longing for another,
Who wasn’t you,
At a long lost party
In old Cambridge town.

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

Comments

Hi Carl, what a wistful poem. I think the title, spacing and content are fine. You could put this to song and music. What form is it?
Enjoyed, Gracy

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"My soul is painted like the wings of butterflies; fairy tales of yesterday will grow but never die, I can fly, my friends.” – Freddie Mercury

I'm really pleased you like it; and yes, it would make a good song, I've not done that yet, but I should do. I've labelled it Free Verse.

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...but so far, it's not, but should be, thank you, Teddy. I am so pleased you like this, and it has made you think. I do agree with you, but...I can remember there was something uniquely awful about leaving a party alone, or being alone following a party, although today, in the unlikely event I'd find myself at a party, I'd want to leave as soon as was even remotely polite!

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Sorry to hear that, Teddy, but being popular only lasts as long as you are popular ;)

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