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Oppressive Heat

Weighing heavy
stifling humidity
choking

The touch of his fingers
against my skin
will quell the passions burning
from within

The feel of soft lips
upon my throat
intensity rises
urgency invoked
flames

Salient syllables
from somewhere in the depths
of my being
stoking the embers of desire
fire

Undulating waves
washing,ebbing, crashing
only to be followed
by the next

Echo,echo
reverberating , surging
let go
breathe deep the essence
of he that will quench

your thirst and feed your hunger
with the oneness of his being
breathe

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Whoa! This is pretty hot, alright! I'm a bit puzzled (in a good way) of just how oppressive it is - it seems very uninhibited, wonderfully exciting and very freeing. Yes, those salient syllables! Great build up and quiet final word. I am wondering if "your thirst" and "your hunger" are speaking about you or the reader? Maybe "my thirst" and "my hunger" ? This is great - double great!
Thank you!
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lol my meaning moi lol love the reaction you just had I'm debating another one I wrote I may have to use the explicit on that one

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pretty evocative of passion and desire for his touch....very sensual too...

raj (sublime_ocean)

thank you

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Thank you I'm sorry lol

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kind of hot and sensual. Nothing like a turned on woman to get things going. Nice phraseology, with: undulating waves etc..
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lol why thank you sir

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