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August Pandemic Contest edited

assasin

single minded destroyer
set on one goal.
odious lurker
going out of control.
fiendish flayer
who cares not the price
as the ignorant take chances
with each roll of the dice.
self-important fools
taking their pleasure
at great cost to others
they have taken the measure.
flaunting their arrogance
so many will perish,
the ones who came before
they who should be cherished.
let this be a warning
in public, wear your mask
or let your conscience
take you to task.

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*see #3 flay flay [flay] (past flayed, past participle flayed, present participle flay·ing, 3rd person present singular flays) transitive verb 1. lash or flog: to whip or beat a person or animal severely 2. strip skin off: to remove the skin or outer covering from somebody or something 3. criticize harshly: to criticize somebody or something harshly and severely, and sometimes unfairly 4. strip of belongings: to take all the money or valuables from somebody, especially by the use of deceit, intimidation, or similar Encarta® World English Dictionary © & (P) 1999,2000 Microsoft Corporation. All rights reserved. Developed for Microsoft by Bloomsbury Publishing Plc.
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reminded me of the voice of a young woman who said i lost my dad who was 65 but healthy...his only preexisting condition was believing in Trump....when I vote by Biden i shall be voting for him...

raj (sublime_ocean)

you are a very wise person, indeed!

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it is a terrible shame. we all live on this planet and should be considerate of others. thanks, Teddy! you've a good heart and mind.

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Hi Cat, well said. Mostly it's younger people who flaunt the protocols. The average age of contagion is now around 36, though the deaths are of older people, the disabled or children. It's easy to wear a mask where I live, the weather is cold, so I use a thick scarf. We can walk outside in our small neighbourhood.
Well said, perfect poem for the pandemic contest.
Take care! Gracy

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thank you so much for reading and commenting. where I live, in Wisconsin, it has gotten to the point that they won't let them without masks into the stores...which in my opinion is a blessing. you take good care of yourself, okay?

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enjoy your coffee ;

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line 8 what do you think about this line instead
with each roll of the dice

nice work here good luck

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thanks much, C!

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thanks for that...it was the chuckle I needed for today ;)

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Hard hitting, does well all thru IMHO. I like it!

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it was very nice of you to tell me so! I appreciate it :)

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just wondering...

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thanks for asking :)

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