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Seasons Change Life.

Seasonal changes in one's life.
give way to fresher encounters
all our lives
else life would have been
a monotonous rose
if it had no colors
nor variety
I suppose

sun needs to brighten worth
give nature newer birth
rains need to wash away
what you may

call unwanted sin

the nudity,
stark nakedness
autumn leaves
must again be recovered
as did Adam and Eve

thus life's humanity and dignity
forever must remain constant
yet not absolutely
does it stand still

life is cyclic
like yours and mine
coming and going,
really dynamic
is it not
all seasonal

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Free verse
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Not Explicit Content

Comments

Wow, this is so vivid. I think the rhythm flows really well.
The only critique I have is that the first verse ends with a period but the second one seems to be a continuation of it. Maybe it's not, but it reads to me like it is so it's a little confusing.
Other than that, I think the enjambment works really well, and the message comes through strong. I think this poem works really well.

Holy Cow !!! Is this really your work ? I'm gobmsacked here. But very happily so. I dont think its perfect I'll be totally frank. But it's very very good and I'm excited to read this, I think you have come a long long way and I have a lot to catch up on. So good to read you old friend.

Hugs and a massive smile Jayne x

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

shall attend to it once
Gracy Ma'am
nits me
Oh what a GLEE
THIS
is real poetry
composed in 2013
now ed like many
NEOS taught me
Thanks

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for ma'am GRACY

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where ru

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