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Dawn Once More

You come early again
‘twas years gone forlorn
when younger
early that morn
between us
pure love was born

‘twas you my dawn
today a fresh one is born
where in the machinations of time
you have gone
another one will be sworn
with caps on
another
dawn
new love
ecstatic breezy morn
happens since times
have gone,

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

Comments

What a sweet, romantic poem, Lovedly. Nice end rhymes and the content is clear as a bright summer day. I have no nits, except the usual boring ones. Tweak out extra words and no need for CAPS!
Enjoyed, Gracy

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"My soul is painted like the wings of butterflies; fairy tales of yesterday will grow but never die, I can fly, my friends.” – Freddie Mercury

Ma'am shall do as advised soonly (new word coined by me please)

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Dear lovedly, your poem is perfect now. It's one of your best, tho' I enjoy everything you compose.
I see you tweaked it already. All the best, Gracy

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"My soul is painted like the wings of butterflies; fairy tales of yesterday will grow but never die, I can fly, my friends.” – Freddie Mercury

You have helped me a great deal
i Bow.
I shall or may be off line for some time .
Till then bye for now

author comment

I enjoyed this but you might want to rethink the last 3 lines as far as clarity goes

thanks stan will see when a bit free
till then hold your stick
don't let the horse kick

Its all about my sweet dawn
when for me she was born
thanks stan
u r now NEOS MAN

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