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Everyone's Writing Vibrantly

Everyone's been
Writing vibrantly.
But no luck,
Just no luck
For the poet in me.

My hand is sore.
My brain is weak.
No gush of ideas,
No words to speak

Everyone seems to be
Scribing vibrantly.

But no luck,
Just no sheer luck...
For the vain poet in me.

Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction): 
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
Last few words: 
These words keep ringing in my head. Just gotta try this out.
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No one can write "vibrantly" all the time. A nice little ditty, reminding us all, that we are sometimes just a little stuck. I have those times, and I work at getting through them, by going through my notebook, looking for ideas that I haven't developed, looking for things that I haven't tried before, and watching what the others here at Neo. are doing. I don't see anything wrong with taking an idea that appeals to you, and giving it a new twist. I mean what is new, anyways? If there is something that hasn't been written about, in one form or another, I will be very surprised! I think you could expand on this very nicely, by using the idea of "vibrance".
What do you mean, "Vibrance"? Color, form, intent? ~ Geezer

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Vibrantly here meaning "with life", "productively", "energetically"; or it may mean almost anything that's positive.

Thanks again.

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Regards,
Dennis

"Death smiles on us all. All a man can do is smile back." ~ Maximus Decimus Meridius

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Vibrantly or not I do hope I still have those juices to come up with. Creativity seems quite blank for me at these times. My mind is not that fully functional due to stress from work.

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Regards,
Dennis

"Death smiles on us all. All a man can do is smile back." ~ Maximus Decimus Meridius

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The judicious use of rhyme always improves free verse in my opinion. And when the muse deserts, why not write of having nothing to write ? lol..................scribbler

I do have a piece about having nothing to write. I'll post it some time for you to dissect. I need your awesome critique.

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Regards,
Dennis

"Death smiles on us all. All a man can do is smile back." ~ Maximus Decimus Meridius

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I'll think this one through. I like the extra syllables more when read aloud. Thanks for the suggestion.

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Regards,
Dennis

"Death smiles on us all. All a man can do is smile back." ~ Maximus Decimus Meridius

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