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Basket of Marbles

If I'm myself
Then I'm me

If I'm someone else
Because I want to be
Then I'm a fraud

If I'm fake
I'm not me

And not being me
Is who I don't want to be

See?

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Well I think I have finally confused myself. lol just a bit of fun.
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Hi, Teddy,
I do see, and therefore I don't think it is confusing at all! Much to think about, and it is a fun poem, but there is also the serious, mature question we eventually ask and hopefully answer correctly: as Popeye would say, "I yam what I yam!"
Thank you!
L

Dear Lavender,
So glad to see you took it in the spirit it was meant. XOXO

Thank you...Teddy

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the fun of the write, the playing in this devise, playing with words and logic.
I would consider a more obtuse title, like the surrealists use.(Like "Egg yolk in a comet's tail" or something else Dali or Magritte would use. That would perhaps make the poem more fun as it plays with absurdities.
and perhaps just end the poem

And not being me
Is who I don't want to be

See?

see what i mean? The one word might just work alone.

Eumolpus
I'd rather learn from one bird how to sing
than teach ten thousand stars how not to dance
ee cummings

I adore your title so much and has me thinking, after reading your grand review i have come up with "Basket of Marbles" for my title, i think that egg yolk in a comets tail is a magnificent title and merits a poem of its own, what do you think?

Thank you...Teddy

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thanks, sure works for me. It's a clever poem!

Eumolpus
I'd rather learn from one bird how to sing
than teach ten thousand stars how not to dance
ee cummings

would say:"I see, said the blind man." Or as Richard Widmark would say: "Sounds reasonable". I love a play on words as you know, so this makes perfect sense. ~ Geez.
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lol I confused myself with this, I was just reading Oscar Wilde and came up with this, he just fascinates me, I am in awe of his mind.

Thank you...Teddy

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interesting progression of thought

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Just having some fun with a thoughts from Oscar Wilde.

Thank you...Teddy

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