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THE LABYRINTH

My life is a web, a network of failure and empty reality. I go out like crackers from a barrel aimed at the sky and return with nothing, but char and smoke that eventually gets swallowed by the wind -
I am a gory metaphor. I sink in a mire, I keep falling and never land - never given a chance to climb back up.

My soul is a shadow. It has no face, It has no rigor. It has no direction. It follows me about like an old blind man led by a stick whose eyes are a young Fulani boy in a velvet cap, on this rugged path _ and if I trip we both fall into an abyss as we have so many times.

I am like a book judged by the cover - and even the few who take their time to flip my pages miss the ellipses…. I have too many ellipses that I becamee an ellipses in your own stories - I shrink in the bright corner of your memories.

I am the Cardinal point, a ship without a compass -

I am the blind that leads the blind into a pit. I am the vision of a child. I do not see beyond the guaranguatourm of ellipses and unwanted memories. My heart is a haze, my life a maze, my path a daze… My life is in a labyrinth that is not my own, I am like a cockroach that wanders into a spider web.

And I wander still like the Cowboys with their herd, searching for greener pastures -
But satisfaction seems not to come with green grasses…. Life is a snare, you will always find green snakes in green grasses -
One solution leads to another problem, one answer leads to another question, arrival is the beginning of another journey.

I am an artist. I paint dreams. I paint perfection in happy pictures. I paint the sky with flying kites. I paint children with happy smiles, homes devoid of divorce, families without domestic violence, children devoid of hunger, I paint education, I paint people without ailments, I paint Justice, I paint good governance, I paint love, I paint immortality -
I paint the irony of my reality.

I am a journal. Sometimes I'm written in prose. sometimes I'm written in poetry. Sometimes I'm expressed with the silence in lurking sadness.

I am a canvas where everyone paints their pictures. To girls a knight in shining armor. To boys a villain, to men an idiot, to women a bad husband, to parents a bad influence, to children a beautiful friend, to orphans a considerate brother, to clients a greedy businessman, to lovers, a beautiful fellow -
But I am a mirror, I show you a reflection of yourself!

I am a mist, a fog, a cloud. I have seen many ends that sprouted many beginnings. I am larvae in evolution -

Sometimes I wonder, will I metamorphose into a colored butterfly or a fiery dragon?

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this is prose, not poetry. But, no less interesting. I feel the picture of your humanity. Your title is good, the theme likewise, your language is pretty good and I find tha the ending seemed to be of a three-fold nature that begs for three different poems. ~ Geez.
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out on this one! I am humbled and aplogetic. ~ Geezer.
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