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Nightscape

shadows slowly lengthen
disappearing gently
into silhouettes

one act follows another
in a harmonic motion

birds return to nests
to chirpy welcome of mates
snuggling together

moon takes center stage
for a romantic ballet

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Structured: Eastern
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for taking time to read. Good to know you liked it and found it gorgeous.

thanks again...

raj (sublime_ocean)

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awww how pretty is this poem especially the birds I hear them at night getting ready for bed(the birds that is lol) I find nothing to add or correct
Raj this poem had a very soothing affect on this reader

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thanks for taking time to read. Good to know you liked this poem and it had a soothing effect.

thanks again..

raj (sublime_ocean)

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Hello raj, what lovely, well crafted poems. One is a perfect haiku, it's almost alive. Could you please explain the whole structure, because I see you have some 2-liners in between. Does it have a distinct name and form?
Thanks so much for sharing your art with us, Gracy

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thanks for taking time to read and your comment....coming from learned poets like you it's like tonic to an amateur like me..

as to the form of 5 liner poem with first three lines having 5-7-5 followed by next two of 7-7 syllables, it is a Japanese form called Tanka... a series of them is called Renga though supposed to be written by two people...Barbara used to conduct workshops on them in the past...

thanks again...

raj (sublime_ocean)

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to have learned something that will bring pleasure. ~ Geez.
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for visiting this page and your comment...

be well..

raj (sublime_ocean)

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