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Worlds Asunder
Two beacons glowing bright
become the sun
when they unite
Two orbs
traverse space
each knowing the others face
Two hearts
ablaze with fire
both will sate
the others desire
One love
waiting to live
one love wanting to give
Both worlds
torn asunder
by time
distance
and space
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Geezer
Mon, 2020-07-27 06:40
There is nothing...
so sorrowful as a love denied by time and space. I feel the ache. It could not be more palpable in this poem. ~ Geez.
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c lynn brooks
Mon, 2020-07-27 06:49
Teddy
thanks so much for those kind words
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author commentc lynn brooks
Mon, 2020-07-27 06:51
Gee
thanks
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author commentraj
Mon, 2020-07-27 12:14
Hi Chrys
I liked this little piece and as Geezer said two Lovers separated by time and space is pretty agonizing for both ...i couldn't understand the first stanza in which it's said "two beacons glowing bright become the Sun"....
regards...
raj (sublime_ocean)
c lynn brooks
Mon, 2020-07-27 14:54
Raj
It was an analogy
two people hearts on fore
when brought together become one orb or one sun
with this in mind re read the first stanza and it will make sense(or at least I hope so)
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author commentraj
Tue, 2020-07-28 04:48
Hi Chrys
thanks for the explanation....yes makes sense for sure re reading the first stanza...
be well..
..
raj (sublime_ocean)