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Grieve Not
Grieve not over the loss of your youth
it was given in preperation
for realities truth
Remember the wisdom
imparted back then
for you will need that wisdom
in the end
Use what you've learned
of the simplistic things of life
like please and thank you
good morning and goodnight
Practice the golden rule
for it is so true
do unto others
as you would have them do unto you
Smile at someone every day
for it was given to you
to give away
Tell the ones that you hold dear
how much you love them
and will always need them near
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c lynn brooks
Wed, 2020-07-22 14:25
Teddy
thank you so much. It has always been my mantra and I raised my daughter this way
Chrys
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raj
Wed, 2020-07-22 13:07
Hi Chrys
I agree with what Teddy has said...liked it...would look at how you change four line stanzas to three liners which generally is the pattern you have followed...
be well..
raj (sublime_ocean)
c lynn brooks
Wed, 2020-07-22 14:27
raj
thank you lol you know I don't really pay attention to lines and stanzas when I write .. I just write
Chrys
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Lavender
Wed, 2020-07-22 14:15
Grieve Not
Hi, Chrys,
A wonderful way to remember our daily affirmations to "doing unto others." Your first stanza is great - leading the way for all that follows.
Thank you!
L
c lynn brooks
Wed, 2020-07-22 14:28
lavender
thank you kindly
Chrys
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Geezer
Wed, 2020-07-22 15:09
Great advice...
to live by. I especially like the one about giving a smile away every day, because that's why it was given to you. Smile on, my dear, smile on. ~ Geez.
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c lynn brooks
Wed, 2020-07-22 17:59
geezer
thank you my friend
Chrys
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