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Mine Man... [Idletime workshop]
Jealous; guard your secrets
don't give them all away
Just little, tiny bits
small pieces every day...
Style / type:
Structured: Western
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction):
What did you think of my title?
Last few words:
I think the brevity of the poem, helps to make my point.
Editing stage:
Workshop:
Content level:
Not Explicit Content
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Comments
Geezer
Mon, 2020-07-20 08:41
Mine Man...
because: It's MINE man. My time, my pieces of life, my personality. ~ Geez.
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Geezer
Mon, 2020-07-20 08:59
I am considering it...
[The title change, I mean]. Thank you. ~ Geez.
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raj
Mon, 2020-07-20 02:14
Hi Gee
I like short poems but I think it is a wee bit too short. Perhaps a better title may be thought of.
Be well..
raj (sublime_ocean)
Edward nigma
Mon, 2020-07-20 07:38
Raj
Okay
Hlm life without literature is a life without logic.
Geezer
Mon, 2020-07-20 08:44
It's...
mine, mine, mine! Not yours, MINE!
~Geezer.
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There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
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Geezer
Mon, 2020-07-20 08:42
Because...
It's MINE! Geez.
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There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
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Lavender
Mon, 2020-07-20 09:07
Mine Man
Hi, Geezer,
When I read your poem title, I thought of those seagulls in "Finding Nemo" - mine mine mine mine! Of course the seagulls reminded me very much of the way people, especially children, act with their possessions. Reading your poem further takes on a bit different meaning for me - as if one is being extremely protective of who they are and have become. If that's the case, how does one do that?
Thank you!
L
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Geezer
Mon, 2020-07-20 20:58
Yes...
Exactly that! You have to have a split personality. Not just a double, but as many as... Well now, that would be telling, wouldn't it? ~ Geez.
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There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.
Lavender
Tue, 2020-07-21 13:43
Hi, Geezer
I foresee a Martin Scorsese film in (one of) your future(s)!
L
c lynn brooks
Mon, 2020-07-20 11:25
Geezer
short ,abrupt , to the point so where is the rest?
Chrys
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