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God is Child Himself

Submitted by lovedly on Sat, 2020-07-11 12:07

God is Child Himself

Without having ever read this
your poem friend

when I was in school
in class 3 or 5
I never went to fourth
double promotion
too intelligent for my age
perhaps
but not a prodigy

I too composed
a similar poem
unknowingly

This world is a stage
A Dolls house
in nursery class
daily we play
where men and women
are its small toys
and
God is he
himself
the Child

Then at 7 years of age
I knew not who Shakespeare is

in fact he was

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

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Geezer

Sat, 2020-07-11 14:09

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can be seen as a form of godhood. ~ Geez.
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Gracy

Sat, 2020-07-11 18:12

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Interesting poem, Lovedly. You've quoted Shakespeare nicely, but I don't see the need for caps. Most of us know about "all the world's a stage..." so there's no need.
I honestly find the poem confusing. Perhaps you could tell us a bit about it. I also learned English when I was the same age, thanks to my immigrant parents.
I'll return, best, Gracy

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lovedly

Sat, 2020-07-11 18:28

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I have brushed up the poem
do let me know if its any better
No SELF PROMOTION
my own creativity
at say 6 or 7

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Geezer

Sat, 2020-07-11 21:08

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obscure references make it hard to understand what you are writing about most of the time. After your reply to Gracy, I finally started to get what it was all about. Now, I understand that you were saying that you had written a poem or story about how children play with doll houses and pretend and that if there is a God; he is but a child playiing with the lives of men and women. An allusion to the play by Willie Shakespeare. Now, I get it! I am 72, not so much younger. ~ Geez.
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lovedly

Sun, 2020-07-12 05:47

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I read so much of poetry
on various sites
poets I meet many
just want to tweet
Its like a treat

Well cut it short
Shakespeare said a lot

Today I am 80
and
had he been alive
he would have said

''HIGH TIME YOU'D SHUT UP''
but
in a single word
just sum it up
young old man

''SANS''

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