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A Slip Of The Tongue...

Submitted by Geezer on Thu, 2020-07-09 17:09

Holding my tongue
they make it sound so easy
but, it really isn't
it's slippery, it's greasy

It often goes a rambling
without my catch-up brain
Saying things without its' knowledge
it causes me some pain

I hold my tongue most times
though I can let it slip
It has to get the last word
make a little quip

It doesn't like to see me cry
It gets mad as Hell
So it tries to make me smile
helping me feel well

This time I'll hold it tightly
I won't let it make a peep
I'll keep it in a headlock
and send it straight to sleep

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Geezer

Fri, 2020-07-10 00:15

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more than a few of those times when I should have just held my tongue. As the poem says; sometimes it just goes off on that little bit of a thing on it's own...It's not so bad as it used to be, when I could still run [or fight]. Now that I'm older and no lungs to speak of; I'm a bit more circumspect. LoL I'm glad you got a chuckle out of it. It's my aim to make at least one person a day smile. ~ Geez.
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Gracy

Thu, 2020-07-09 19:01

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Hi Geez, also giggling, same as Teddy. I think I also say stuff that I shouldn't. Great title and rhymes. Nothing to nit, just thank you for sharing your amusing thoughts. Best, Gracy

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Geezer

Fri, 2020-07-10 00:19

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get a giggle out of this one. It makes my day to think that someone as nice as you; is on the other side of the world, smiling at something I wrote. I'm always glad to share anything to make a smile. ~ Geez.
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Geezer

Fri, 2020-07-10 00:23

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I try to give out at least one laugh a day. I'm pleased if this did it for you. I thought the title was pretty good; slippage of the tongue, is a common thing, I guess. ~ Geez.
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Lavender

Thu, 2020-07-09 22:21

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Hi, Geezer,
I like this so much. Once something's been said and out there, you can never take it back. I'll give that headlock maneuver a try and see if that works! Nice poem!
Thank you!
L

Geezer

Fri, 2020-07-10 00:31

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one of those people that remember it years later! I'm sure that if I mentioned some of them, the people involved, would say; Huh? I don't remember that. I'm sure that others would say; "Oh yeah, I remember that time you said:... Sometimes the headlock works, but you have to be quick, The brain doesn't know that it's going to have one of those spells. Glad you enjoyed. ~ Geez.
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raj

Fri, 2020-07-10 07:38

I enjoyed reading this poem about tongue...yes indeed we need to be mindful of what it does :)

be well...

raj (sublime_ocean)

lovedly

Fri, 2020-07-10 11:43

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reminds me of my lovely
doggy
it's always hanging
around
wet and gasping

it is really handy
at times he licks
at times he conveys a smile
my tongue lashes back
hello
lovely
lick me

he wags his tail and conveys
oldie

I love your grand kids
and runs away
quickly

my tongue comes out O Lovely
now not to be seen
lol

c lynn brooks

Sat, 2020-07-11 17:26

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sounds very familiar lol
open mouth insert foot hey
my mouth seems to engage after my brain makes sense of things
enoyed readung

Chrys

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