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All is Well In My World

Submitted by Barbara Writes on Wed, 2020-07-08 02:53

There’s a lot to see under the sun
There’s a lot to hear under the moon
Under the dark of night, creatures sing songs of joy
Daylight brings hustle and bustle of daytime

COVID 19 a pandemic arrived
Earth heals in the night.

The flicker of a candle burns bright in the night
Brings delight to eyes that all is well in my world.

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Barbara Writes

Mon, 2020-07-13 07:25

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I appreciate your visit to my work. I corrected the grammar. Glad you like it

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Gracy

Wed, 2020-07-08 11:33

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Dear Barbara, I song of joy, indeed. My only nit is that it's a tad prosy. Myself, I would try a re-write of some verses to do away with some "the's" and other unnecessary words.
All the same, enjoyed and thanks for sharing, keep bringing joy to this family. All the best, Gracy

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Barbara Writes

Mon, 2020-07-13 07:27

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I made some grammar changes. thanks for the suggestions.

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raj

Wed, 2020-07-08 12:55

Good to read your poem ....nice one...others have already commented before me...

be well..

raj (sublime_ocean)

Barbara Writes

Mon, 2020-07-13 07:28

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I always appreciate your visit. Glad you enjoyed it

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