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Outcast

Anxiously gazing around the room I can't help but realize everybody is bonding, everybody but ME,
But it's nothing I'm new to it's always a new day the same story hoping people will start seeing me differently.
I can't help but overhear everyone's thoughts about me
shall I say they are so quick to judge?
They've never cared to actually get to know me or my personal story.

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Welcome to Neopoet family, Mia. I hope you feel comfortable here. You're certainly not invisible to us, trouble is that there are so many posts that I only saw yours now.
I agree with Teddy about tidying up your verses a little. The theme is obviously very impórtant to you on a personal level. Perhaps you've had some life experiences that made you feel left out? The last line says that nobody has cared about your personal story. Maybe you can write a poem about yourself. Or use 3rd. person.
I wish you well and hope you'll integrate soon. All the best, Gracy

"They've never cared to actually get to know me or my personal story."

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"My soul is painted like the wings of butterflies; fairy tales of yesterday will grow but never die, I can fly, my friends.” – Freddie Mercury

...is a nice large glass of wine.
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xxx
Edna
Poet(ess) to the Stars

I agree with Teddy and Gracy's comments in toto, so don't feel alone In fact Teddy has also recommended some small changes you need to make..

Cheers!

raj (sublime_ocean)

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