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#Palestine

"On the other side
of the river
the grass is greener."

I wonder though,
the cattle are less happy,
and so is the sky.

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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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I just wonder how much my reader could get out of this without me explaining. I think the title might give a hint as titles should.
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I'll keep the grey color in mind for a more dark mood.
Thank you!

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Perhaps should be the herd? I wanted the people who live there under the occupation.

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The sky and the people are under occupation, so sadness is the general mood there.

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I think changing to gray is more accurate I believe.

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the play of words, but then I fear that the reader would think it a typo.

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Knowing that I live in Jordan (on the other side of Jordan river) does that help understanding in any way?
You are not far though.
Thanks for your everlasting encouraging words dear.

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Jordan is well known for the best olive trees and olive oil, so you're totally right dear Teddy but this is just part of the story.
I thank you truely.

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Is well known for olives.. I believe!

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thinking, that you have seen the cattle on the 'other side' and don't think that the grass is any greener or the sky any bluer. ~ Geezer.
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There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.

Things to admit,
First, this little piece is born as a result of the title workshop. I found out that titles could inspire real poems.

Second, Jordan and Palestine were one land with only river Jordan to separate them, but the fact that Palestine is greener is true, it's soil is more fertile.

Third, the cattle here represnts the people of Palestine,
and they're unhappy as well as the sky all because of the occupation.

Hope I make it clearer.

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know that in fact, Palestine is greener! That notion did not even enter into my mind. Yes, it is clearer now. Thank you, ~ Geez.
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There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.

the flu lol

Why?

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Not blue or less blue work better?

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I think this clears the confusion dear Teddy!
Can't thank you enough for keeping me on the right track!
Appreciate your help dear.

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for the echooooo

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...Palestine is denied statehood and decency by the Israelites and their American stooges.
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Edna
Poet(ess) to the Stars

Never enough to feel sorry.
Palestinian never stop fighting for their freedom.
Thank you for reading and the sympathy though.

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...need a good THRASHING.
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xxx
Edna
Poet(ess) to the Stars

Liked thee verses...

be well...take best care...

raj (sublime_ocean)

Thank you! I am so happy to see you on my page.

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