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The waiting

waiting, always waiting
some to be born
others to die
rows upon rows of people
what is it all for
empty rooms with empty chairs
all to be filled with the ones waiting

Time travels in a Mobius strip
we travel the same path
endlessly floating between
past present and future
always waiting in time without end

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I thank you kind sir

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that Jerry gives: "Tempus fugit" always reminds me of a vulgar thing we used to say in certain places. "Time; fk it!" But I guess that it applies here. If we allow it, time will get us all. I like the circle of time and time again; waiting to pounce on us. You certainly have a way with the entanglement of words. ~ Gee.
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Entanglement? never thought of my writing in that way Thanks I think?
lol thanks for the read

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was that I was entangled in the words and felt them more keenly. ~ Geezer.
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There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.

I certainly like the Mobius strip comparison, lynn. Yep, time catches up with us, no way out. Some sooner, others later. Some far too soon, as with my son who got ALS aged 24 and died aged 29 years.
No entanglement for me, enjoyed, despite the lurking of death for all of us.

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"My soul is painted like the wings of butterflies; fairy tales of yesterday will grow but never die, I can fly, my friends.” – Freddie Mercury

thank you I'm happy you got the mobius strip reference

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and once again thank you

Chrys

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Hello, Chrys,
I always appreciate learning here on Neopoet, and Mobius strip is the lesson for today. Great visual! This morning I made a phone call and was transferred 3 times, only to be disconnected and had to call again - very Mobius-like. I feel the waiting in your poem, there's a heaviness to it that really accentuates the endlessness.
Thank you!
L

I take it you looked up what a mobius strip is lol

thank you for reading I appreciate it

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Hi, Chrys!
Yes! Google is my poetry pal!
L

lol

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